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Copy Editing and Proofreading Examples
Example
#1 (from an ESL student's MBA
thesis)
Before Edit: Projects
of cross-border telecom infrastructure are large and dedicated systems which are
tied to specific cites and involve large numbers of users.
Therefore, cross-border infrastructure projects require large costs
and long-term payout period. In
such a system, project operators will be exposed to revenue risks.
For instance, an operator could have insufficient revenue as a
result of difficulty to increase user charge due to the government that in
some occasions wants to keep the user charge unchanged, while economic
situations do not allow the operator to operate under such a low level of
the user charge.
Example #1 Copy Edited (Using Track
Changes):
Projects
of Ccross-border
telecom infrastructure projects
are
entail
large,
and
dedicated systems which
that are tied to specific scites
and involve large
numbers
of numerous
users. [<Can
you approximate how many users? e.g., ...that generally involve over
10,000 users.] Therefore,
cross-border
infrastructure
these
projects
require large costs
[capital?] expenditures and
a
long-term payout period. In
such a
system
projects,
project
operators will
be
exposed toface
revenue risks. For instance, an
operator could have
encounter insufficient
revenue shortfalls as
a resulting
from of
difficulty
to increase
user charge due to the
government regulations
that in
some occasions wants to keep the limit
increases in user charges
unchanged,
while despite
economic situations
factors
that make it impossible for some companies do
not allow the operator to operate
remain
solvent under
with such a low level
of the user charge. #1
After
Copy Edit: Cross-border
telecom infrastructure projects entail large, dedicated systems that are tied to specific
sites
and involve numerous
users. [<Can
you approximate how many users? e.g., ...that generally involve over
10,000 users.] Therefore, these projects
require large capital expenditures and a long-term payout period. In
such projects, operators face
revenue risks. For instance, an
operator could encounter revenue shortfalls resulting
from government regulations that limit increases in user charges despite economic
factors
that make it impossible for some companies to
remain
solvent with such a low user charge.
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Example #1
Proofread
Projects of
cross-border telecom infrastructure are large and dedicated systems which
that
are tied to specific scites
and involve a
large numbers
of users. Therefore, cross-border infrastructure projects require large
costs
expenditures
and long-term payout periods.
In such a system, project operators will
be
are
exposed to revenue risks. For
instance, an operator could have insufficient revenue as
a result
of difficulty to
in increasinge
user charges
due to the
a
government that in
some occasionsmay
wants
to keep the user charge unchanged;,
while
however,
the economic
situations
do
may
not allow the operator to operate under such a low level
of the user charge.
#1
After
Proofread
Projects of cross-border telecom infrastructure are large and dedicated systems that are tied to specific sites and
involve a large number of users. Therefore,
cross-border infrastructure projects require large expenditures and
long-term payout periods. In such a
system, project operators are exposed to revenue risks.
For instance, an operator could have insufficient revenue because
of difficulty in increasing user charges due to a government that may want to
keep the user charge unchanged; however, the economic situation may not
allow the operator to operate under such a low user charge.
More?
See Example 2
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